Monday, December 19, 2011

Making it Right

How would you make it right?

Another quicky.  Oddly enough, I started writing this one with an more loving feel.  Ed was the woman, and she worked hard to replace Calvin's wife to make it up to him.  But when I got to the last part of the story in my head, it just didn't have any oomph.  I don't think many lovey stories have a lot of oomph, but they should at least end with a good old fashioned 'awwww, ain't that sweet!?' feeling.   And I just didn't get it from what I wrote.

I briefly considered writing out a longer story, to get the reader more emotionally involved with Ed's plight, but then I would probably not have been able to use this design form.   And then that dark side of my mind took over.... what if that wasn't Ed?  What if Ed did all of that TO Calvin.  Mmmm... that throws some squirm factor.  So a quick edit on the last quote, and then taking out any clue as to who was going through the transition, and I had this story.

Now it has oomph.  And a little squirm factor to boot.

4 comments:

  1. I love the layout and nice job with the ending, definitely gives it a fun twist.

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  2. Nicely done, like seeing new layout styles as well as new stuff from you hun. ^^

    Sexy!

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  3. Nice how the darkness of the story contrasts with the light, airy feel of the pic and layout...

    Nice work!

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  4. Nice cap hun, and the ending certianly made me giggle. Hadn't expected the twist that was for sure!

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