Maid To Do It!

Big tittied maid!

Another of my earlier works.  Sadly like "Training" I don't recall much about the process. But as I read this, I can tell that I still hadn't found my current vibe.  Right now I really enjoy writing about the transformation, and then the acts of humiliation.  In this cap I all but ignore the transformation, and instead of 'showing' the humiliation through the story, I simply 'tell' you about it.

At 5 panels, it is one of my 'longer' works, but you can see that it was mainly a way to use more images.  The text is very large.  Text wise, I wouldn't call this long at all.  I've now written single panel caps that have more text than this.  But again, I blame that on still being new(ish) to capping.  Reading it now, I see many (MANY) places that I would love to just thrown in a lot more details.  For instance when Mr. Loomis first talks to Kira, I am just giving his dialog but not giving much to Kira's response beyond 'Kyle was fuming'.

Design wise I see promise here, but I don't like the end result. I really liked the image that I used in the background (of the ballgag), but its is a little overpowering.  And the text..... ick.  I have no idea why I chose that font.  Even at this size, it is a pain to read.   And to make it all worse, I chose purple.  Really??? Purple?  There is absolutely nothing purple in these images for the text to bounce off of.  A dark golden/yellow would probably have worked, and if nothing else a good classic black.  Then the title could be a fancy color to make it stand out.

I think this series shows promise of things to come, more than anything.  I like the image selection, and the framework of the story.  I would use certain design aspects, and learn from others.